Photographer by day, Fire Fighter by night

by. Chad-Cinque

Sirens blared in the night as fire fighters rushed to save a store as it went up in smoke. The fire fighters kicked doors down and shot their fire hoses in hopes of extinguishing the fire. Danny Pitttelli, a 21 year old UB student, was one of those firemen.

Danny, a Long Island native, decided at a young age to follow the footsteps of his father. These footsteps lead Danny to enlist as a volunteer firefighter.

Danny’s first fire fighter action came one night as he sat eating leftovers with his family. He received an automatic alarm notifying him of a possible fire. Leaving his chicken on the table, Danny suited up expecting a false alarm. To his surprise, he arrived on location to see a smoking 99 cent store. He quickly aided his fellow fighters and until the fire was extinguished

Although Danny enjoys the rush of fighting fires, he true passion is in photography. Just like firefighting, Danny followed his father’s footsteps into photography. He wishes to pursue his passion for photography into a career in media production. Danny sees himself in New York City or Los Angeles in the next couple years follow his graduation, although he would like to continue living in Buffalo.

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One response to “Photographer by day, Fire Fighter by night

  1. Lead: 4 Great. You have good journalistic instincts. It’s always good to start with an action scene and then move away from it and focus on the character.
    Interviews: 2/3While you got some info about Danny, much of it rests on the surface. That tells me your questioning needs refining. How did he feel at that burning store. Did he kick in one of the flaming doors? If so, how did THAT feel? Why does he love firefighting. Describe the rush. Why does he want to follow his father in both firefighting and photography? What does he love about each? What does he love about his father? Why does he want to go to LA or NY, yet love Buffalo. You need to ask more questions so you can explain better.

    Grammar: 3 You are making errors that I assume are careless, but that are annoying to a reader. I will let it slide this time, but if you don’t proofread your prose why should I care enough to read it?

    Look at the last paragraph. You say “he true passion is photography” and “in the next couple of years follow graduation.”

    Also, you can boost your writing my making it more vivid. For instance:
    Danny’s first fire fighter action came one night as he sat eating leftovers with his family.

    This is a good start. You could tighten it by saying,
    One night, Danny was eating chicken wings (or whatever) with his family when the alarm sounded. Fire. He dropped the greasy wing into his peas and headed out the door.

    He received an automatic alarm notifying him of a possible fire. Leaving his chicken on the table, Danny suited up expecting a false alarm.

    He expected a false alarm, but when he arrived he saw clouds of black smoke xxxx (whatever he saw) The idea is to paint the picture.

    To his surprise, he arrived on location to see a smoking 99 cent store.

    He quickly aided his fellow fighters and until the fire was extinguished.
    This sentence kills the drama for the reader. Give me the details.
    He and xx firefighters worked xx hours to control the blaze. In the last xx minutes he xxx. When they finished the store looked like it had been dipped in tar. (or whatever description he gives you).

    Use your words to make the story come alive. Broadcasters do this all the time, then they match the visuals to make the drama real.

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