Interview with Greg Borowiak

BY BRITTANY SAGERclassmatepic

Greg Borowiak, a 20-year-old from Angola, NY, knows just how hard it is for college students today to figure out exactly what they want to do with life after school.

After attending the University at Buffalo as a Business major for a year-and-a-half, Borowiak was removed from the program; an event, he said, gave him the push to do what he really wanted.

After a difficult summer of indecision about his career path, Borowiak looked back at his childhood aspirations for ideas. With a little hesitation, he confesses that as a kid, Claymation was a favorite hobby of his. After his mother gave him a digital camera, he began making his own clay-model films, which transformed into a strong interest for movies in his teen and adult years.

Once Borowiak reinstated this dream, he decided to pursue it as a career; something he knew he couldn’t do at UB. Borowiak applied to the University at Old Westbury and SUNY Hunter but after missing a deadline and stopping an application, he did not end up attending either school.

Still, Borowiak remains persistent. While doing as much as he can with media at UB, he hopes that Five Towns College on Long Island will be his next stop. While directing does not appear to be his forte, Borowiak hopes to be involved in the editing/writing aspects of media in his future career and would love nothing more than to leave his suburban roots and call the nation’s Big Apple, NYC, his new home.

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One response to “Interview with Greg Borowiak

  1. Lead: 4/4 Good — you are trying to pull me in, which is great. Edit yourself more and it will be better:
    Greg Borowiak, a 20-year-old from Angola, NY, knows just how hard it is for college students today to figure out exactly what they want to do with life after school.
    Take out “just” “today” and “exactly” and it’s already better!

    In the next paragraph the word removed is odd. What does that mean? Kicked out? If so, why?? If not, then what do you mean?
    Interviewing: 2/3 You got a good story to work with — his change of career — so you need to mine it. How did he feel when he left/got kicked out of the business school program? What happened during that summer? What was he thinking/feeling? When did he first start thinking about film again? Is he worried about making money at it? If you ask more questions, you will have more to work with in your narrative.
    Grammar/style:3 Your grammar is fine, so it’s time to work on more advanced writing techniques. Think more carefully about the words you choose. Great writers do this — remember Flaubert and Mark Twain’s comments. Writing is hard work. But the payoff is prose that soars. It doesn’t just come the first time you sit down.

    For instance:
    Once Borowiak reinstated this dream, he decided to pursue it as a career; something he knew he couldn’t do at UB.

    This sentence is flat and confusion. How do you reinstate a dream?

    Borowiak had a new dream now. A better one.
    (It’s okay to use fragments sometimes, but you have to know the rules in order to break them!)

    He would pursue film. He would write films. But how would he learn? The program at UB xxx (here you need to include why the program at UB didn’t fit his needs)

    Do these edits make sense?

    Borowiak applied to the University at Old Westbury and SUNY Hunter but after missing a deadline and stopping an application, he did not end up attending either school.

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